I was delighted to read your poem about landing on the moon! I really like how you used heaps of adjectives (describing words), it made me feel like I was walking on the moon myself!
Walking on the moon would be such a cool and interesting experience. What is something cool and interesting that you have experienced before? Personally, I have been bungee jumping, It was so scary but also very fun!
What else do you think you would see on the moon? Would it just be rocks and craters? Maybe you would see aliens!
Good job on including a photo in your blog post, it really helps readers relate to your writing even more.
Keep blogging in order to increase your chances at winning one of our awesome SLJ prizes!
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Mōrena Tim,
ReplyDeleteI was delighted to read your poem about landing on the moon! I really like how you used heaps of adjectives (describing words), it made me feel like I was walking on the moon myself!
Walking on the moon would be such a cool and interesting experience. What is something cool and interesting that you have experienced before? Personally, I have been bungee jumping, It was so scary but also very fun!
What else do you think you would see on the moon? Would it just be rocks and craters? Maybe you would see aliens!
Good job on including a photo in your blog post, it really helps readers relate to your writing even more.
Keep blogging in order to increase your chances at winning one of our awesome SLJ prizes!
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Charlotte
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